Thursday, October 1, 2009

Revised- Topic Sentence- Caitlin N

In the story "The Lady or The Tiger," the princess values her daring love for the prince more, all of her painful decisions that she's going through for him, make it known.

I learned that when you have your class mates help you and they give you advice, it makes a big difference. But the only time it will help is when you consider what they are saying and really think hard about it. After taking a break from working on my sentence it also helped me gain a better sentence. Mainly i didn't learn that much of anything.

4 comments:

  1. Very good point! I never thought of the story this way, I just thought of the princess and how much she loved her royalty, and herself. But you definitely define another great point, nice job Caitlin! ;)

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  2. I like it a lot, but I think that you don't need to the "most likely" part, but I agree with what you said about how she values and how she feels about him.

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  3. Good job Caitlin! I never thought of the story this way! You might want to use better word choice and switch out some words so it makes more sense but otherwise good job!

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  4. This is so great!!! I really like how you told how she feels, I have not thought of it that way. :)

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