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The first sentence is really good and it rhymes but I think the second sentence should be the topic sentence that the first sentence should be somewhere in the paragraph.
I think instead of using the first sentence just stick with the second one. The second one is strong and shows the true value of the princess.
If you want to keep your first sentence, add a "..." at the end or fit it in somewhere in the opening paragraph.<3 XxOo Claudia
I think you should keep the second one and just add a little more detail.
haha welll thankyou all but the first one was kind of a joke!!:)
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ReplyDeleteThe first sentence is really good and it rhymes but I think the second sentence should be the topic sentence that the first sentence should be somewhere in the paragraph.
ReplyDeleteI think instead of using the first sentence just stick with the second one. The second one is strong and shows the true value of the princess.
ReplyDeleteIf you want to keep your first sentence, add a "..." at the end or fit it in somewhere in the opening paragraph.
ReplyDelete<3 XxOo Claudia
I think you should keep the second one and just add a little more detail.
ReplyDeletehaha welll thankyou all but the first one was kind of a joke!!:)
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