The thing the princess values the most, is the love from her lover because she became so jealous when was flirting with the other lovely girl, and felt no feeling for her.
After reading what others said about my first topic sentence about The Lady and The Tiger I learned that I need to be more detailed and show things from the story that support my opinion. Learning in this activity was easier because i got to work with others in my class and they gave my ideas on how i could make my writing better.
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I think your topic sentence has the right idea but its sounds kinda confusing and like your rambling. Try making it more simple but make it so you can write something about it.
ReplyDeleteThis is good :) but just like explain more about them flirting and how the princess feels.
ReplyDeletei think this is good, but you should say something about her not caring about anyone but herself being happy.
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