The princess valued a young man's love more than anything, but being semi barbaric would her personality get in the way of letting her lover live?
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I like my sentence the way it is...."but being" part is a little sketchy. I don't know how I would change it.
I didn't really learn much from my topic sentence. I only had one partner to reply to my post, so I didn't get much feedback as others did.
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I think that what you have is really good. It is catchy and captures the eye of the reader. The only thing you might want to consider is adding some more details.
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